Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The rapid rise of technological devices has sparked debate over whether innovation is narrowing or widening the gap between rich and poor people.
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it is true that some cutting-edge technologies remain unaffordable for a large part of the population, I believe that technology has largely contributed to levelling the playing field by expanding access to information and opportunities. Those who believe that
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digizalitation
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digitalisation
digitalization
has led to a greater gap between the population, argue that not everyone
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the possibility to buy the latest cutting-edge technologies. In fact, even if smartphones and computers are now owned by a significant amount of people, some devices
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still unaffordable.
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, a
last
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generation
Iphone
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iPhone
costs
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roughly
1.200 euros, which is often less than 1
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income for some families.
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, the ownership of technology has itself become a means of defining
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social status.
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, causing the social divide to grow. Just think of those
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the ultimate Tesla model with
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for parking versus those who
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buy a Polo from 2000.
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, the price of basic tools
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fallen over the past few years. Almost half of the Western citizens have phones, televisions and house appliances. Even if
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social status remains, they have
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which were impossible in the past.
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, with the
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everyone can access free information and education, which are crucial for increasing living conditions, including by contributing to the literacy of society. In conclusion, it is certainly true that
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social distance may arise depending on the ownership of some new phones or
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, but it is worth considering the impressive change that these give to poor people, who before could never imagine
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free of charge access to knowledge.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction to make it strong and clear.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas better; use clear paragraphs for each view and your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Avoid long sentences and use simple language to express ideas more clearly.
task achievement
You provided a balanced view of both sides of the argument, which is a great strength.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion nicely summarizes your ideas and gives your opinion clearly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital divide
  • Socio-economic classes
  • Economic opportunities
  • Democratizes access
  • Technological gadgets
  • Advanced educational tools
  • Remote work
  • Online courses
  • Digital literacy
  • Digital inclusion
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Technological advancements
  • Cutting-edge technologies
  • Economic standing
  • Quality of life
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