There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children, Dscuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

Towards modern life, there has been a growing number of “Double Income No Kids” or DINK
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.
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is because procreation
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some pros and cons. Entering parenthood
mean
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a range of responsibilities, not only to economically provide but
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to nurture.
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,
time
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, career, and
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couple’s
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the couple’s
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aspirations will become considerations
on
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in
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deciding have or not to
have
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.
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, by having kids, parents could continue
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their lineage
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and might have someone to
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take care
of them when into old age. Some couples without kids tend to have more
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to develop themselves as a person or as a
couple
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. As a
couple
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, they could have more quality
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to do things together,
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as travelling, doing hobbies, or enjoying life without more responsibilities
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nurturing a child.
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as a person, they can plan some life’s
aspiration
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aspirations
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including career,
bussiness
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business
, higher education, and wealth.
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stability become
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for couples, particularly for those who live in pricey
city
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cities
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.
Rising
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a kid means
staggered
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economic burden in the future since,
for instance
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in Indonesia, the budget to nurture a kid with proper life and education (preschool to
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degree) needs
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an averagely
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averagely
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IDR
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1.500.000.000. quality
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of
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couple
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a couple
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, some negative impacts
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"DINK"
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the "DINK"
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lifestyle could not be overlooked. The economic condition of a country depends heavily on
young
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population.
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, the zero birth would disturb the economic state of the country
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lack
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the lack
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of working age,
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, a country only
depend
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on elderly people.
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, there are some stigmas regarding
procreations
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procreation
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. The “dink”
couple
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might receive negative comments or threats from relatives or society because of opposing
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religious
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and cultural
belief
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beliefs
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on procreation.
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, couples without kids may bear
of
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loneliness in old age. In conclusion, a popular "DINK" lifestyle brings out some pros and cons to consider. Not having a baby means less burden on
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couple's
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the couple's
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budget,
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however
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this
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zero birth trend will slowly bring
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a negative
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impact
to
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on
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the economy of the state.
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, the positive attitude towards procreation
bring
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brings
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happiness to
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the family
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and might
beneficial
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be beneficial
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to elderly parents.

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task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of the DINK lifestyle, which is crucial for addressing the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay flows well, and you have made logical connections between your points.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • couple
  • decide
  • children
  • money
  • travel
  • hobbies
  • personal development
  • income
  • childcare
  • education
  • costs
  • time
  • relationship
  • bond
  • stress
  • parenting
  • peace
  • happiness
  • lonely
  • future
  • care
  • company
  • societal pressure
  • judgment
  • friends
  • family
  • society
  • choice
  • isolated
  • joy
  • fulfillment
  • rewarding
  • experience
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