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Some people think that children should start learning a foreign language when they are very young. - Do you agree or disagree with this view?

In today`s era, learning
foreign
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language
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 is
utmost
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 priority because other
nations
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nations'
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languages
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 like English
is
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are
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 needed
for
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us in daily life for news and
other purpose
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another purpose
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.It is easy to learn
language
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in
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at
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young
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a young
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age
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.I completely agree with
statement
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 that
pupil
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pupils
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 should learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 when they are young.
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 with,It is very easy to learn anything when we are at
students
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age
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.It is called
growing
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the growing
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 and learning
age
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.So we can learn anything that we
are
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practice in our study life.
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,in
school
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school,
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 we
are
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learn lots of different
languages
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 as a subject
that is
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 designed like
this
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 so children can start gaining basic knowledge about the
language
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. and they can
develope
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develop
 as they
growing
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 up.
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 of
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this
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this,
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 we start learning English from class 3.
This
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 is
a
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very helpful when students grow up.
Secoundly
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Secondly
,When we learn anything
in
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our
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tiny
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age
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that
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we gain
quickley
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quickly
 in future ahead.
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,If we start writing with
left
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 hand we can learn very smoothly with the same hand. After
certain
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age
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age,
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 we can not write with
other
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the other
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 hand and we can not even learn with
other
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the other
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 side.
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,After
young
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a young
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age
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age,
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 we can not learn any basic including
language
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.
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A servey
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servey
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survey
 from
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the university
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university
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 of Melboen says young
age
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 is the best
age
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 to learn skills including
language
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. In conclusion, we can say that as
student
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students
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 we have to start learning foreign
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language
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languages
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 if we want to improve our
skill
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skills
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 in new
languages
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.After
study
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studying
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age
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age,
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 it is very hard to learn
such
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a
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a language
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languages
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.

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task achievement
Improve your introduction by clearly stating your opinion early on.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
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coherence cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes, such as 'Secoundly' instead of 'Secondly'.
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You have a clear opinion and support it.
coherence cohesion
You've made an effort to structure your essay with paragraphs.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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