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The maps below show the porth harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the porth harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These maps provide key information about how Porth Harbour has changed from 2000 until nowadays.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that significant developments have been made to the southeast
side
Use synonyms
 of the map, where it is shown that new facilities were constructed,
whereas
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 the building in the corner was replaced.
In addition
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, to the main road's
side
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, many
changes
Add the auxiliary verb
changes have
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also
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 been made,
such
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 as
fishing
Correct article usage
the fishing
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 boats' removal and the new roads' building.
According to
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 what is shown, the new hotel
side
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 had major developments. There was a castle in 2000, which appears to be abandoned, and near the castle is
the
Correct article usage
a
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 public beach for everyone to utilise. Recently, they added a coffee and a new road that leads to the hotel. In terms of the public beach
side
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, it was public in 2000 and
remaind
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remained
remain
remind
 public until now.
Moreover
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, a boat was added
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besides
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beside
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 the old boat, and the dock was expanded to
accomidate
Correct your spelling
accommodate
 more boats.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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