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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the annual profits of the three different
bakeries
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 in Calgary between 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
bakeries
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 of Amandine and
Bolo
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 show a significant increase over 10 years,
while
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Mari
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Bakeshop
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 demonstrated a dramatic decline. Amandine
Bakery
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 and
Bolo
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Bakery
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 displayed a similar tendency for income. The
Bakery
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 of Amadine had $ 55,000 in income in 2000, and for the next five years, the profits remained the same. From 2005 and 2010, the proceeds increased and doubled. The
bakery
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 of
Bolo
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 earned the least among the three
bakeries
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, accounting for $20000 in 2000, and in the next 10 years,
Bolo
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bakery
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 showed a dramatic increase of triple.
In contrast
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,
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 portrayed a trend of decline. In 2000,
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 earned the most, which accounted for $80,000. Between 2000 and 2003, it slightly decreased.
Nevertheless
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, from 2004 to 2010, the returns of
Mari
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Bakeshop
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 significantly decreased and ultimately dropped to $40000, which is the lowest earnings among the three
bakeries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakeries, bolo, mari, bakeshop, bakery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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