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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the architectural design of a public
library
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 of
two
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decades
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 and its current look. Overview, from the diagram it could clearly be seen that there was a significant change in the
library
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 design compared between
two
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decades
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 and currently, the obvious absence of
the
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tables and chairs just after the entrance which could be in the
library
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 design
two
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decades
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 ago. Moreso, the enquiry desk
room
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 at the
right hand
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 corner of the
library
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 has been reconstructed
to
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 a cafe with an entrance compared to
two
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decades
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 ago, the middle side corner of the
library
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 which was previously used for keeping adult fiction
books
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 has been moved to the right corner and used for keeping all reference
books
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, and the previous adult
non fiction
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books
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 on the right side has been entirely removed and a
self service
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 machines which
has
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 been added to
this
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 space presently,
furthermore
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, the old reading
room
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 is currently been used as a computer
room
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 and the entrance repositioned as well.
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, the
room
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 for children's
book
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books
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in
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from
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two
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decades
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 ago has currently been turned
to
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 a lecture
room
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,
while
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 else the
room
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 used for CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games has been changed to both keeping children's
books
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aswell
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as well
 as storytelling events with
two
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 sofas.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, two, decades, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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