You have recently heard that a friend of yours has had some problems as a result of some unusual weather. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:      -  express your concern (i.e. say you are sorry to hear what has happened)
     -  tell him/her about a similar experience that you once had
     -  give some advice, or offer help

Dear Sam , I hope
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letter finds you in a radiant of health and good spirits. I am writing
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letter to show my concern regarding the damage
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your house ceiling
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a natural disaster. I came to know about the tornado through a news channel which was really excruciating news .
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thing happened
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year
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me
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when I used to live in Taxis ,
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torrential weather and hail , the windows and doors of my house
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devastated
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, it ruined my entire place . I will send you
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contact number of a contractor who will repair the ceiling at
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reasonable price and on top of it he can offer you a discount . For
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time being , you can come over to my place along
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family and we will have
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time together
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, it will help to reduce your stress and anxiety . I am looking forward to seeing you . Yours lovely Harv

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coherence and cohesion
Try to have clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
task response
Make sure to follow the formal letter format more closely.
task achievement
You expressed your concern well in the introduction.
task achievement
You offered a solution and made a kind offer of help to your friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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