Some people believe that living in a city offers greater opportunities and advantages, while others think that life in the countryside is more beneficial. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a trend for the vast majority of people to hold an opinion that the city provides better conditions than the countryside
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because they have a range of facilities and beneficial situations;
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, others hold the opposite view.
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essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the former. On the one hand, one of the most beneficial sides of living countryside is fresh air without air pollution, which offers less proneness to diseases. To illustrate
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, a survey recently conducted by the New York Times revealed that urban residents are more prone to heart and liver diseases than village citizens.
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, rural areas not only offer a cleaner and healthier natural environment, but they
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provide a significantly lower cost of living when compared to the often expensive and fast-paced lifestyle in cities.
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, when people live in urban regions, they have access to education and healthcare, cultural diversity and entertainment options. Despite the fact that city residents struggle with the high cost of living, urban areas provide them with better job opportunities.
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, social studies have shown that people often get jobs in big cities,
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countryside areas suffer from unemployment.
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, access to high-speed internet, libraries, sports facilities, and other public services is more consistent and convenient. Having discussed both views, it can be concluded that both opinions are valid;
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, I am more inclined to support the view that the city gives greater opportunities in various industries, with higher salaries and career growth options.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and presents both sides well, but you could use clearer sentences in some parts. Try to avoid overly complex structures to make your ideas clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. You can use linking words more consistently at the start of your paragraphs to improve the flow.
coherence and cohesion
You have a strong introduction that clearly states your position and outlines the essay.
task achievement
Your examples support your points well, especially regarding the advantages of city life versus countryside life.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban
  • rural
  • opportunities
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • accessibility
  • pollution
  • cost of living
  • cultural diversity
  • healthcare
  • education
  • environment
  • social activities
  • lifestyle
  • employment
  • income
  • relaxed
  • fast-paced
  • serenity
  • infrastructure
  • commute
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