You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need saying why you need them making arrangements to meet Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’

#city #country #friend #home #visit #email #arrangements #‘dear

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Dear Preet I am glad to hear that you are coming

Brampton

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to Brampton

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city in the coming month

December

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of December

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and we will meet each other after 5 years. But

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need your favour to buy some traditional

attires

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attire

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for me when you will come. Actually, I came

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Canada

since

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2020 but

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was slim

that

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time,

while

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have gained some weight and I am not

looking

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look

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good in

the

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old

attires

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attire

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. When you

will

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apply

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come, please buy some cultural

attires

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from our back home and I know, you have very good taste in shopping and choose

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a colour

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colour

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colours

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for outfits

as well as

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will send you

measurement

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measurements

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so, you can stitch the

outfit

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according to

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that way.

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, I am doing work in

the

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planner

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company and in the summer,

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will attend so many marriage

function

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and our

indian

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tradition is very popular

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around

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the

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while

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whole

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world.

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is the main reason, to buy traditional attire

for

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apply

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apply

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Moreover

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will share my

canada

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Canada

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contact number so, when you

will arrived

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at the airport

then

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will

pickup

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pick up

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you and we will go directly for dinner. If you have any

question

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, you can text me on my contact number. I am looking forward to seeing you! Warm Regards Hb

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Coherence & Cohesion

Ensure consistency in verb tenses to maintain better coherence.

Coherence & Cohesion

Consider breaking down long sentences into shorter ones for improved readability.

Task Achievement

The letter successfully addresses all required points, making it a complete response.

Task Achievement

A friendly and warm tone is maintained throughout, suitable for a letter to a friend.

Coherence & Cohesion

Logical structure is maintained with clear paragraphs focusing on specific ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

213 words

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Excitement
Upcoming
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Gratitude
Willingness
Anticipation
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Flight schedule
Availability
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