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Writing Samples
Band 4

some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should to work in the country where they did their treining. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

There is no denying the fact that
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working
 is the most important thing to make
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 own money. It is
commonly
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 held belief that engineers, doctors and professionals need to
work
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 in the same
country
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 that they did the training, there is
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 an argument that
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they should be free if they want to
work
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 in
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another country
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country
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. In
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essay
 will analyse
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 topic from both
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 of view and give
me
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 opinion . On
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 hand, working from where you
born
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 will be
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easier
 for the person and less
stress
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. In
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, you will know the rules of the
country
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 and how everything is working that will make you improve your skills faster
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then
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 ever and be good
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 what you do.
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, some people it is hard for them to get
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away
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 from their
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family
, and friends.
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, most of the public
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they
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decide
 to
work
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 out because their
country
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are
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 not good to
work
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 in so
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they
 need to
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 out of the
country
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 .
On the other hand
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, working in a
diffirent
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different
country
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 will open many doors and opportunities to make your life better. It is
possable
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possible
 to say that,
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is
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 some
experience
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 you will face in
other
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country
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 but that will make you learn about
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yourself
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 and know exactly what you
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want
.
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, you will be indepanded on
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yourself
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 to improve more in your
work
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 and career. In the
end
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 my opinion is, it
is
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depand
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depends
 on the
country
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 if the
country
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 is suitable for
work
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 it is good to
work
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their
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 but if it is not
then
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 it is better to leave and find
you
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your
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 way,
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being
 in the same place
sometime
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sometimes
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 is bad for the person so changing is good for the
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future
.

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task achievement
Try to clearly state your opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and stays focused on it.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of vocabulary and correct spelling to make your points clearer.
task achievement
You have provided arguments for both sides of the discussion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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