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The chart below shows average daily sales of different food items in a cafe during winter and summer in the year 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows average daily sales of different food items in a cafe during winter and summer in the year 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the average daily
sales
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 of various
food
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items
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 in a
cafe
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 during two seasons;
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 summer and
winter
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 of the calendar year 2023. Units are measured in numbers,
that is
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 number of
servings
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 in a day.
Additionally
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, the data provides information on
sales
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 of
food
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items
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such
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 as hot
coffee
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, cold
coffee
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, frozen dessert, soup and salad.
Firstly
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, in the summer season, the highest
servings
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 of 40 come from cold
coffee
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, followed by frozen dessert (35), hot
coffee
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 (30), and soup and salads contributing to approximately 25
servings
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.
Furthermore
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, during the
winter
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 season, hot
food
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items
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such
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 as hot
coffee
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 and soups contribute the most towards the
cafe
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's
sales
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,
that is
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 on average 75 and 50
servings
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 in a day.
Additionally
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, warm
food
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items
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such
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 as frozen desserts and salads contribute approximately 25
servings
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 in a day. Cold
coffee
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 is one
food
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 item, the
cafe
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 does not sell during
winter
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due to
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 the seasonality factor of the product. To summarize the given data, during summer, irrespective of the
food
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items
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, the
cafe
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 sells an average of 30
servings
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.
However
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, during
winter
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, the data clarifies that the
sales
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 of
food
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items
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 are seasonal,
for example
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, cold
coffee
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sales
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 are negligible and hot
food
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items
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such
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 as hot
coffee
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 and soups contribute the most across the two seasons.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, such, that is".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, food, items, cafe, winter, servings, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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