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the graph below shows the number of enquiries by the tourist information office in one city ove six-month period in 2011.

the graph below shows the number of enquiries by the tourist information office in one city ove six-month period in 2011.
The line graph shows the number of
enquiries
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 received by a tourist information office in a city over a six-month period in 2011. The data is categorized into three methods: in person, by
telephone
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, and by
letter
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/
email
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.
Overall
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, the number of
enquiries
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 made in person and by
telephone
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 increased over the period,
while
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 those made by
letter
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 or
email
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 declined. In-person
enquiries
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, which began as the least common method, became the most frequent by
June
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. In January,
telephone
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enquiries
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 were the highest at around 900, followed by
letter
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/
email
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 at about 750, and in-person at approximately 450.
Telephone
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enquiries
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 fell slightly to 800 in February,
then
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 remained stable at around 1000 until April. After that, the figure rose steadily, reaching close to 1600 by
June
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.
Similarly
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, in-person
enquiries
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 increased continuously throughout the period, overtaking
telephone
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enquiries
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 in May and peaking at nearly 1900 in
June
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.
In contrast
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,
letter
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/
email
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enquiries
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 declined steadily, dropping to about 400 in May and remaining at that level in
June
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, telephone, letter, email, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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