Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development? Give your reasons and examples.

There is an increasing number of people who prefer to buy online rather than in a physical store.
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by many consumers
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its several advantages which will be discussed in
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essay. The benefits of purchasing through online shops include convenience,
time
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efficient and very
economic
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. Obviously, it can be done anywhere and anytime as long as someone has an internet connection. Ordering foods and needs through mobile apps could save a lot of
time
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and money because people won’t
be needing
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to drive to the supermarket.
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, for a working mom like me, it would provide me extra
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to do house chores rather than having it spent
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long
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queue and commuting just to get the ingredients I needed to prepare the next day. Not only did it spare me hours for other productive activities but
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save
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me
few
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bucks. Since, every
time
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I go out shopping, I always have the tendency to dine outside when I see my
favorite
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restaurant. Despite
of
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the popularity, the drawbacks of having to buy goods at an online shop would not guarantee quality and there will be chances of receiving a wrong product. I
have
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experienced it
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week when I purchased a pair of football
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for my nephew.
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of having it in red
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, the item that
has been
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was
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sent was in blue. What made it even
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worse
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is
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the type of clothing used. It was not
authentic
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as advertised. I
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noticed that there are increasing complaints lately for the same experience.
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, more and more individuals are choosing online transactions
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the life-saving hacks it provides.

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