Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?make an essay more with at least 260 words make this essay to partial agree

Nearly all societies have homeless individuals.
Wihle
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While
some believe that providing them with
cash
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is the most effective way to assist, I partially agree with that approach, as there are plenty of alternatives
such
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as providing
with
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long-term labour skills and improving
self- worth
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self-worth
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,
well-being
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and well-being
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, that can be crucial for those who are struggling with
homelessness
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Whilst financial assistance can provide immediate relief, it must be combined with other support systems to avoid prolonged issues. On one hand, giving
money
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directly to homeless people offers undeniable short-term benefits.
Cash
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enables them to purchase essentials like food, clothing, or medicine when they need it most. For those temporarily homeless
due to
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sudden job loss or family issues,
this
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immediate assistance can be crucial for
facing
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survival. A study that has been published previously found that homeless people given
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primarily
most
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spent it on food and housing, disproving the myth that they would misuse the funds.
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,
money
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alone fails to address
causes
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the causes
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of
homelessness
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. Many homeless individuals struggle with mental illness, addiction or lack of job
skill
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, challenges that
cash
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cannot solve. In these cases, giving
money
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without guidance might enable harmful habits rather than recovery.
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, treating homeless individuals with
the
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dignity can help restore their self-worth. Cities like Helsinki in
finland
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Finland
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have successfully reduced
homelessness
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through "Housing First" programs that combine free housing with
counseling
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counselling
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and job training, demonstrating that comprehensive solutions work best. In conclusion,
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giving
money
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helps meet urgent needs, it should be part of
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effective strategy including housing, healthcare, and self-esteem. Only by addressing both immediate survival and root causes can truly solve
homelessness
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.

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task achievement
Try to make your argument a little clearer by clearly expressing your position on the topic in your introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all sentences in the paragraph support it.
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Include more specific examples or evidence to support your main points.
positive
Your essay starts strong by clearly stating your partial agreement with the topic.
positive
The use of examples like the study on spending cash adds credibility to your argument.
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You have a clear conclusion that wraps up your main ideas well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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