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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams illustrate the transformation of Porth
Harbour
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 from 2000 to the present. It is
noticeably
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 that the
harbour
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 has been changed to be more attractive for tourism
while
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 it keeps
maintain
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 its services. The main changes are
an
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 establishment of a new accommodation place
along with
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 its private, and a refreshment facility. There are some facilities that
keep
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 unchanged, and
also
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 some additional upgrading amenities as an improvement. A disused castle
in
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 the southeast side has been replaced by a new hotel, and the beach next to it has been set dedicated
for
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 the hotel exclusively. There is a new block for cafés & shops not far from the hotel. At the
harbour
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 services area, there are some improvements
consist
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 of an additional area of showers & toilets beside the car parks, and a new dock for passenger ferries. The location of marina fishing boats and private yachts has been swapped as well. Some facilities that
are remain
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 exist are the public beach in the north, the car parks, the showers & toilets block and the lifeboat.
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, it can be seen that the
harbour
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 has improved its quality by upgrading its facilities and adding some tourist attractions.

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coherence
Work on making clear comparisons between the past and present features. You can use words like 'now' and 'then' to help clarify differences and similarities.
task achievement
You clearly identified some main changes in the harbour and described new facilities.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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