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The bar chart illustrates the difference between the number of local people in Europe in different age level who often go to the gym between 1990 to 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the difference between the number of local people in Europe in different age level who often go to the gym between 1990 to 2010.
The bar chart gives information about the various among the figures local individuals in Europe of different
age
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 levels who often go the
gym
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 during the period from 1990 to 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the various
age
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 visit to the
gym
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 exhibits different trends over the given period, they all experienced an upward trajectory.
However
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, the pace of growth varied , with some showing a more rapid increase than others. As the graph shows, the percentage of
age
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 visits to the
gym
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 between 18-24 and 25-34 started at around 10 per
cent
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 and 8 per
cent
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 by 1990. Followed by 1994 to 1998 reaching approximately 30 per
cent
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.
However
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, both figures continue to follow the general increase until the end of the period,
whereas
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 the 18-24
age
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 represents the highest percentage of people visiting the
gym
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.
By contrast
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, ages 35- 44 and 45 and over commenced at 2 per
cent
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 in 1990 respectively. Regarding there was an 8 percentage slightly increase from 1994 to 1998 .In terms of noticeable growth around 29 per
cent
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 in the
age
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 35-44 through the year 2010, the 45 overage-old
age
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 by 2010 arrived at 9
cent
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 the number of visiting the
gym
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, gym, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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