It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music and others not. Discuss both view and your opinion.

It is considered by some individuals that most
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people are born with talents like, good in sports ,and music.
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, others are not talented by
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. I believe that
talent
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is not totally
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, some flourish
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talent
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after becoming mature. In
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I will discuss both views in subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
born
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with natural talents can be a part of genetics.
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, many actors from
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got
this
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talent
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from their parents. Like, Kareena
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,
she
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become
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actor
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by watching their ancestors who started their
carrer
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careers
in acting, and now have
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place in
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.
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, singers, some folks have amazing
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voice
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since their childhood and from that age they decided to pursue their future in
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the music
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field
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. Here Lata
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can be
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the best example
for
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this
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. She had
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an incredible
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voice
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and
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legend
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because of her natural
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given by god. It doesn't neglect that she
also
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took classes for
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rehearsal
making her
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more immaculate, but by
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birth
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she got
wonderful
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a wonderful
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voice
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.
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, those who
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not born with natural talents, these type of people grow their
talent
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in that
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field
where they believe they will
get
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success
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.
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, in growing children
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build
their interest in some fields which they liked most and that
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become
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their passion.
In
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result
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, they will
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to
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their career in that
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particular
field
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.
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, they will take coaching to polish their skills in
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a more
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effective way.
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, a person who has
interest
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an interest
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in sports he/she will
started
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taking guidance from
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age to flourish their skills.
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, by doing
hardwork
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hard work
they will make
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dream come true in
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the coming
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years. To
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, there are many causes behind these
both
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views for those who have natural
talent
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from
birth
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or those who
does
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not.
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, I think
talent
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can
be adopt
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in
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any age if one
have
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great
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a great
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passion for any particular
field
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and
make
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makes
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themselve
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oneself
pride
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proud
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in future.

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Your examples of Kareena Kapoor and Lata Mangeshkar are relevant to the topic.
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You clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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