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The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph above illustrates the
number
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 of people playing four types of sports-basketball,
tennis
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,
badminton
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 and rugby- in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, rugby was the most popular
sport
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 in the beginning, but
tennis
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 became equally popular in 1995 and was identified as the most popular
sport
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 by the end of the period given.
Nevertheless
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, rugby became the least popular
sport
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 with
badminton
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 by the final year. In 1985, the
number
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 of rugby
players
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 was 250
then
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 gradually decreased to 200 after 10 years. The figure fell significantly to 50 and became the least popular
sport
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 by the final year.
In contrast
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, there were 150
tennis
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players
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 in 1985. The
number
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 rose considerably to approximately 220 by 2005, making
tennis
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 the most preferred
sport
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 within 20 years. Regarding the
number
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 of basketball and
badminton
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players
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, around 80 and 60 people played basketball and
badminton
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 respectively. The numbers were relatively constant throughout the period. By the end, the
number
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 of basketball
players
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 remained the same as the first year,
while
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 the
number
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 of
badminton
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players
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 dropped slightly to 50.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tennis, badminton, sport, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • stable
  • comparative analysis
  • dominance
  • decline
  • steady growth
  • significant change
  • regional popularity
  • time period
  • sports activities
  • data representation
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