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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the view? What sort of punishment do parenta and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children .

Many students believe that studying multiple areas
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 core ones is better than focusing only on
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 field. Despite the benefits of learning a variety of subjects, I am convinced that concentrating on
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 qualification is more effective.
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 essay will explore both sides and outline my view. On the
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 hand, a wide range of subjects leads to a wide range of career choices. A student can take different classes if he is uncertain about his future profession.
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, a learner in his first years of university deliberately took many unrelated classes to discover his passion later.
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, he ended up with
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 different major that he hadn’t previously explored.
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 reason, broader options can help determine the right path in life.
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, flexibility isn’t always beneficial because people should decide on
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 main area of concentration for better time management and
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 well-being. Understanding
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 main field is much easier, and
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 will have more time for other responsibilities
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 as meeting up with friends and family, resting, and dedicating time to oneself. By taking breaks, there is an opportunity to recover faster and increase productivity and efficiency, without worrying about overworking and distress.
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, studying numerous disciplines offers flexible career alternatives, but it is less effective than focusing on
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 potential negative effects on mental health.

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Make sure to stay focused on the main topic throughout the essay. Some points seemed a bit off track from your main argument.
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Try to add more clear examples to support your arguments. This will make your points stronger and more relatable.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly connects to the next one. Using more linking words can help improve the flow of ideas.
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Your introduction clearly outlines your view, which helps set the stage for your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You provided a solid conclusion that summarizes your main points well.
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Each paragraph has a main idea, which is good for clarity.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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