Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some communities believe that competition at work ,school and in everyday life is acceptable and it’s good
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argue that cooperating is better than competing against each other .
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essay will discuss both views and explain my opinion . On one hand ,people think that being competitive at a job or in life
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is better than being cooperative because they see that competition gives the person more value among other communities, and if you are competitive at a job you can get a better position and that person will have more respect from public ,
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a study by the university of Oxford , students who were competitive in their study get better grades and showed a leader features like independence and the self-confidence,were as the other students who were cooperating with
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had lower marks and
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they could not depend on their self on simple tasks .
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, people believe that participation is better because in a job
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they will produce better assignments and be more creative .
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, you will gain admiration
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and respect and you will be destined among the community if you are cooperative with people . In another research on a workspace in a company, the value of the company rises because the workers showed cooperation in their work. In conclusion ,
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both views have valid arguments, I believe that competition in work or daily life is better than cooperation with
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because I would like to have a position in any place I will be in ,cooperation with
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means that you all are the same .

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Make sure to clearly present both views in your introduction. Mention that you will discuss both sides before stating your opinion.
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Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to show what you will discuss.
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Check for grammatical errors and try to use more varied sentence structures to make your writing flow better.
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You presented both views on the topic, which is a good way to show understanding of the question.
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You provided examples to support your points, which helps to clarify your arguments.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • excel
  • outperform
  • advancements
  • academic standards
  • work ethic
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • unhealthy rivalries
  • harmonious
  • supportive
  • collaborative learning
  • social skills
  • communication skills
  • sense of community
  • collective goals
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