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Band 1.5

The pictures show the process of making cherry jam

The illustration depicts how cherry
jam
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 is prepared. The 9-step begins with shaking
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the cherry’s
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cherry’s
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cherry
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 tree and ends with
labeling
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labelling
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on
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apply
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new products
This
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 is achieved by turning cherries into
jam
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 that can
then
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 be turned into commercial goods. The process starts with
vibrating
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a vibrating
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 tree ,so that can crops
then
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 be dropped on the ground.Which are
then
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 collected and transported by truck to a processing plant to be stored by a machine. When they have been correctly stored
of
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apply
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stems and leaves,
they
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apply
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 are washed and removed stones in the middle of
fruit
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the fruit
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.
At
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In
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 step 5 the cherries
is
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are
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 cooked in
a specialised equipment
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specialised equipment
a piece of specialised equipment
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 with extra
ingredient
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ingredients
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such
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 as lemon juice and sugar etc , so can
then
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 the resulting
jam
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 be checked by a person. After
that
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that,
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 the
jam
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 is put into jars which are
then
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 stuck a label on the goods.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay needs a clear introduction that explains what the pictures show.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences for better clarity.
task achievement
Add more specific details about each step in the process to support your main points.
task achievement
You have a clear outline of the steps involved in making cherry jam.
coherence and cohesion
You use chronological order to present the steps, which helps in understanding the process.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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