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In recent years, the use of personal digital assistants (PDAs), such as virtual AI assistants and voice-activated devices, has significantly increased in both personal and professinal environments. Do the advantages of relaying on those technologies outweigh the disadvantages?

In today`s era, we are using AI devices and personal
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assistance
tool
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tools
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 everywhere around us at
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as well as
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 in domestic
use
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 type of
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assistance
 made our lives very easy
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 to before,
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increased
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 of
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tools
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. advantages of
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 instruments outweigh any disadvantages. Technical
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 of
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 requires high investments, subscription and
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maintenance
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costs
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.
failure
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softwere
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software
 can harm our
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business
. we are
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relying too
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 much on personal assistance devices so we can not
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remember
 things because
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 we always seeking
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that whenever we
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need it
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, at my workplace TESCO we failed to reduce prices
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failure
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the failure
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 of personal assistance devices, in
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a results
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results
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 all products
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 gone in
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. The
advantages
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 of
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 AI
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 is we can perform our
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 easily in everyday life and at work as well. with
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the use
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this
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 we can locate and find
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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, brands
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use
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this
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these
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tools
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 to help their customers and
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employees
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, they can easily map the products
with
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using AI
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. So they can find things for
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customers
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 when they
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the superdry
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superdry
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 store,
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 asked for,
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a particular
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 product and they
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 me
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straight
 away to that product with
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use
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the use
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 of
AI
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an AI
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 tool. that made my customer
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experience
 so delightful. In conclusion,
although
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 the chance of
failure
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 of AI
tools
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 is there,
but
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 it is very rare. advantages
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 as consumer satisfaction
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obey
 the disadvantages.

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task achievement
Your introduction is clear but could explain the topic better. Try to express both advantages and disadvantages more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Right now, some ideas feel mixed together. It will help to separate them into distinct sections.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple phrases to connect your ideas, like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'. This will help the reader follow your thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar to improve clarity. For example, 'assistance' should replace 'asistance' and 'relying' should replace 'relaying'.
task achievement
You did a good job explaining some advantages of AI tools with an example.
task achievement
You included a personal experience, which adds interest to your essay.
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