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Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many individuals believe that the best solution to solve the environmental issues consists of rising
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 prices. I agree with
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 there are
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 other measures which can be taken to tackle them. By increasing the cost of
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people are pushed to choose more eco-friendly alternatives,
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 as electric and hybrid vehicles.
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 shift will reduce significantly the emission of carbon dioxide
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 the atmosphere, which is one
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 main causes of environmental problems. Nowadays,
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, many cities around the world, Rome and Paris
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, are prohibiting
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-powered vehicles which consume
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 in the centre of the city, leading to a drastic improvement
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 the quality of the air in these areas.
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, it is important to acknowledge that there are
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 other factors which have
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 impact on the environment. To mention some of them, manufacturing industries’ pollution,
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forest deforestation and the use of non-recyclable materials. To solve these kinds of factors, the engagement from government and individuals is crucial. Indeed, the government should introduce taxes for those firms which register a level of pollution over an acceptable threshold,
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 people should adopt more frequently ‘’green’’ habits, like using only recycled materials and doing
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separate waste collection. In conclusion,
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 I firmly believe that
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rising
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 the
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 cost is indeed the best method to face
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environmental controversies since it would bring people to make “greener” choices, it is important to know that there are
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 other figures which damage the environment and both public and private actions should be taken to address them.

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You have a clear introduction that outlines your viewpoint.
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You provided a practical example of cities improving air quality by reducing fuel-powered vehicles.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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