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Band 4

Some people believe that individuals have no power to improve the environment, and only governments and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

there is no denying the fact that
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 some believe that individuals have no power to improve the environment, and only
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
 and large companies can make
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difference
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,
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 strongly disagree with
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 will discuss both
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people
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people
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thats
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that
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difference
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they
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are wrong
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because
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because
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individuals
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 can make
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a lot
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a lot
 of
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, there
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 a group of people back in 2010 who has
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 to clean campaign the streets
their
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 neighbourhood, they
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 to cleaning from trash and cans that
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 behind by the
tourist
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tourists
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 and some
local
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locals
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, and had
good
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 impact on the
envoriment
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environment
 which has
inchase
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increased
 the oxygen level ,
due to
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 , removing the trash
of
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 the ground and helped the grass to grow .
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governments and large companies can make a real
difference
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 to the
enviorment
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environment
and helps the
enviorment
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environment
 because the air got polluted in the first place by the
factorys
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factories
factory
 and the smoke coming from the chimney, and governments can be a part of it and encourage people by giving them the correct motivation , and put restriction the
factorys
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factories
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factors
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 , replacing the plastics by another production like papers . in conclusion,
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 strongly
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believe
belive
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believe
 that
one
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 person can make
big
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difference
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 to the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
,and
also
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government
goverment
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government
 and big
compines
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companies
 and large
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companies
compaines
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companies
can make it too we
all
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Your essay would be stronger if it clearly says whether you agree or disagree right from the start.
coherence
Try to use clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea with supporting details.
coherence
Use simple sentences and check for spelling mistakes. This will help your readers understand your ideas better.
task achievement
You presented both views of the topic, which is good.
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You gave an example of a community cleaning effort to support your point, which adds value to your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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