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The bar chart below shows how many million Australians used certain types of social media from 2018 to 2020.

The bar chart below shows how many million Australians used certain types of social media from 2018 to 2020.
The bar chart below compares the number of
millions
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 Australians using different social media platforms from 2018 to 2020.
Overall
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,
while
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 the number of
users
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 of YouTube and WhatsApp showed substantial growth over the period, the
users
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 of Facebook declined significantly. Whilst, both Twitter and Instagram
users
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 hovered around a constant level.
Firstly
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, YouTube witnessed a significant increase in the number of
users
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 from 13
million
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 in 2018 to 17
million
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 in 2020.
Similarly
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, there was a jump in WhatsApp user numbers, starting from just below 3
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 in 2018, increasing to around 6
million
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 in 2019, and exceeding 8
million
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 in 2020.
In contrast
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, Facebook lost its subscriber base, falling from 12
million
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 in 2018 to below 10
million
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 in 2020,
although
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 it maintained its position as the second-largest subscriber base compared to other platforms.
Finally
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, Twitter and Instagram user bases remained stable at 4
million
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 across the three-year period.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words users, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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