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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent times, the issue of whether
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 around the world should be available in supermarkets has emerged as a matter of significant concern to the general public. From my point of view, I opine that
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 development has both negative and positive
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 on individuals and economies. On the one hand,
people
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 should recognize that the availability of a wide range of
food
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 products from different countries enriches consumer choices.To illustrate, in Vietnam, supermarkets sell not only local fruits but
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 imported ones like grapes, blueberries, and kiwis, which allows customers to enjoy a variety of tastes all year round.
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mean
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 that
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 wide selection meets different tastes and diets, helping
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 eat more healthily. Another key point is that
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 trend enhances cultural exchange through cuisine.
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 is because of the fact that international
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 options allow
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 to experience foreign cultures without leaving their own country.
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, it is equally important to consider that
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 trend
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 to serious environmental problems. One convincing argument is that imported foods often lose their freshness during long-distance transport, which can reduce their taste,
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and nutrition
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, and make customers less satisfied.
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, a growing number of
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 believe that Relying more on imported products can hurt the local market.
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, if
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 choose imported fruits
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 of local ones, local farmers may lose income and face a higher chance of unemployment. In conclusion,
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 it is true that
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food
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 trade provides convenience and variety to consumers, it is.
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 raises significant issues related to
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 quality and local market sustainability.
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, I believe that
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 development is a double-edged sword.

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Task Achievement
Try to expand on your ideas with more examples and details, especially in your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly link your ideas using connecting words to make your argument flow better.
Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly states your opinion about the topic, which is a strong start.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided good points that show both sides of the argument, which helps in discussing the topic well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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