Many people drive personal vehicles to school and work. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this type of transportation? Discuss both and give your own opinion.

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amount of
people
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use their own vehicles to go to
school
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and
work
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. What are the advantages and disadvantages of
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kind of transportation ? In recent years transportation
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developed than in the past . There
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many advantages of having your own car and using it to move to your
school
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or
work
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. Driving your personal car to
work
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will save you a big amount of money
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long
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the long
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life term
instead
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of using it for
taxi
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a taxi
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or metros or others .
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kind of transportation will slightly make your life easier . It will not make
u
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you
get stressed with
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a bunch
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of
people
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in
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the same train and
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time
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searching for
taxi
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a taxi
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.
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other
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the other
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hand , there
is
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are
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some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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of
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to
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having your own vehicle and using it to move to your
school
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or
work
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.
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example
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suddenly the streets are crowded and a
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trip will take you
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apply
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1 hour , or you woke up as usual and went to your car and started turning it on and it won't
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. Gas these days is so much
expensive
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more expensive
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, a trip from your home to your
work
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in some situations would cost more than a metro trip . There is a
big
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large
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amount of
people
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that
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who
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use their own vehicles to move to their
school
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or
work
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. Many
people
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might disagree and
in
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on
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other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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some will agree , That the advantages of having your own vehicle
outweighs
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the disadvantages .

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and clear support. For instance, discuss a specific advantage or disadvantage deeply in one paragraph before moving to the next point.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction should include the topic and your opinion clearly. Instead of saying 'In other hand,' use 'On the other hand.'
task achievement
Offer more specific examples in your paragraphs. For instance, mention what kinds of problems people face when their vehicle does not work.
task achievement
In your conclusion, restate the main points and emphasize your opinion strongly to give a clearer ending.
task achievement
You have identified both advantages and disadvantages of personal vehicles well, which is important for the essay topic.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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