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Some people believe that university education should be free for everyone, while others think that students should pay for their universities. Discuss both view and give your own opinion?

Some individuals argue that all people should have access to free higher
education
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,
while
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 others believe that higher
education
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 should not be free and paid by
students
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. In my opinion, I believe that studying at
university
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 should be free of charge for everyone, as it ensures equality among
students
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 and is considered to be their human right.
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, it boosts the nation's
economy
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 in the long term. some argue that getting higher
education
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 should be free for all people because not all individuals have the ability to pay for their
education
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.
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, the ones who are unable to afford
education
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, usually are the ones who most need it to get a decent job.
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, if someone lives in poverty and wants to get an
education
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 to get a decent job in future but
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cannot afford it, they may get stuck in the poverty cycle .
Therefore
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, to ensure equality in society, getting higher
education
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 should be free. Others think that
university
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 should not be free because it may affect the quality of
education
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 and become burdened by the government, as there is not enough budget to manage facilities and teachers. I disagree with
this
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 view because many countries provide free higher
education
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 and that doesn't affect
neither
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either
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 the quality of learning nor become a burden on the government, it may actually boost the nation's
economy
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 in the long term.
For example
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, Germany, Norway and Saudi Arabia provide
university
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education
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 and that didn't affect their
economy
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, but actually improved it.
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,
students
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 may not take studying seriously if they don't pay for it.
Although
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this
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 may be true in some cases, but not always. If
students
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 take debt to afford to study that may put them a huge stress and they get distracted from studying . In conclusion, I think
university
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education
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 should be accessible to everyone for free because doing
this
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 ensures equality among members of society and it eventually can boost the country's
economy
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.

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