The diagram shows the process of making instant coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the process of making instant coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the process of making instant coffee. Write a report of at least 150 words showing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
THE DIAGRAM SHOWS HOW
COFFEE
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IS MADE THROUGH SEVERAL IMPORTANT STEPS.
OVERALL
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, MAKING
COFFEE
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INVOLVES MANY CAREFUL AND
METICILUOS
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METICULOUS
STEPS FROM START TO FINISH.
FIRST,
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WORKERS PICK THE
COFFEE
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BEANS
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FROM
ITS
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THEIR
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PLANTS.
THEN
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THE
BEANS
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NEED TO BE
DRYED
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DRIED
PROPERLY BEFORE
NEXT
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THE NEXT
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STAGE. AFTER DRYING, THE
BEANS
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GO THROUGH
ROASTING
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A ROASTING
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PROCESS WHICH GIVES THEM THEIR SPECIAL AND COMMON DARK COLOR
FOR
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apply
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US
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apply
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. ONCE ROASTED, THE
BEANS
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MUST BE COOLED QUICKLY TO MAKE THEM READY FOR NEXT STAGES.
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COMES THE GRINDING ,
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STEP BREAKS THE
BEANS
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INTO SMALL PIECES SO WATER CAN EXTRACT THE TASTE. THE
GRINDED
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GROUND
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BEANS
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GET MIXED WITH HOT WATER TO MAKE
COFFEE
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LIQUID.
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MIXTURE
THEN
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GETS STRAINED TO REMOVE SOLID PARTS. FOR INSTANT
COFFEE
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MAKING, THE LIQUID GOES THROUGH MORE STEPS. THE STRAINED MIXTURE GETS
FREEZED
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FROZEN
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FIRST,
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THEN
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THE FROZEN LIQUID IS
GRINDED
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GROUND
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AGAIN INTO POWDER FORM.
FINALLY
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, THE POWDER GOES THROUGH VACUUM DRYING TO REMOVE ALL MOISTURE.
THIS
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MAKES IT READY FOR PACKING AND SELLING IN STORES.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "first, ".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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