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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Writr an letter to your friend. In your letter Describe where you would lived when you were a student at the university. Recommend the best what from him/her to look accommodation. Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation.

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to request to not close a Sports and leisure
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center
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centre
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 in our town. In Guelph,
a
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apply
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Sports activities are Very important among youngsters. My
firends
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friends
 and I use the club to play cricket and many more sports. The
leisur
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leisure
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center
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centre
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 should be open because it is the place where all locals Come and meet each
others
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other
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 in their free time. It brings people Close and
make
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 strong
bond
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bonds
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 in
community
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the community
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,
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while
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 playing or doing exercises. If
this
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 running
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center
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will be
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 closed, it will
effect
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affect
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 locals in many ways.
Such
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 as, people may not meet close
onces
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once
ones
 frequently, or some might Stop doing exercises, and
yougsters
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youngsters
 may
involve
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be involved
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 with
unusal
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unusual
 activities. I kindly request you to keep open the
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 in
the
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apply
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downtown
of
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Guleph
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Guelph
, as it is a favourite place of locals. I hope you understand. Thank you for your attention. Yours faithfully,
Jemish
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Jewish
.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple connectors like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to make your ideas flow better.
task achievement
Add more specific details to support your points about how the sports center helps the community.
coherence and cohesion
You have included a clear greeting and closing statement.
task achievement
The overall message of your letter is clear and understandable.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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