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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree?

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history, reading, writing, and mathematics remained as necessary sections of education.
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, some individuals claim that
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 list after an increase in
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 wide range of areas. I agree with
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 the incessant innovations in
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, which require people to catch recent developments
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 and the replacement of jobs with artificial
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. First of all, it is important to acknowledge that everything is changing because of technological advancements.
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 three other parts of education remain relatively stable as the years
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, a new feature for computers or other electronic devices is introduced every day. In order to be called
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an educated person, it is demanded to be aware of recent improvements.
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, at the beginning of the century, it was sufficient to know how to start a
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text on Microsoft Word, which was a great asset on one's CV. Yet two decades later, recruiters do not even consider
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 a basic knowledge that everyone must know.
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, artificial
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 is used within most companies to facilitate
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work. Automated processes enable people to read, write, and even solve complicated mathematical
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, the need for experts in
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,
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 the demand for skilled workers who know
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day-by-day
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day by day
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, a book printing company use more AI
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history, reading, writing, and math
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 consistent as important parts of education during the centuries, the need for
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undeniable
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 increase. In my opinion,
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 because of continuous developments in
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