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Band 2.5

The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plans below depict the difference between a harbour in 2000 and its current layout.
Overall
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, some main facilities are added on the north
side
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 with the development of supporting amenities on the south. On the north
side
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 of the
harbor
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harbour
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, the public beach location still remained the same, with an additional
of
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apply
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one dock on the west
side
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 serving for
passanger
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passenger
 ferries.
Besides
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 the new dock, now fishing boats are placed as a substitute
with
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for
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 the marina (private yachts) on the south
side
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. Today, there are two direct accesses from
main
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the main
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 road, just behind the fishing boats and marina.
On
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In
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 the north, there is no difference
than
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between
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year
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the year
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 2000, as the first access
connect
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connects
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 the main road with the showers and toilets,
as well as
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 the car park.
However
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, there is an addition for one restroom
facilities
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facility
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, on the main roads' south
side
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 access, nearing the second car park. From the other road, cafes and shops are now available
Linking Words
besides
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beside
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 the lifeboat.
In addition
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, there is a
one
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apply
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new way for the Hotel which
previously
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was previously
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 known as a disused castle,
while
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 the public beach behind now turned into
private
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the private
a private
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 beach for the hotel.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state the main changes and compare them in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Add clearer linking phrases to help the reader follow your ideas better.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points about the changes.
task achievement
You have described the changes in the harbour well in general terms.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with a logical flow of ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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