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Band 4.5

In the future, no one will buy printed newspapers or books, because everything they want can be read online without paying for it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, a
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noticeable
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 why there exist opinions about in the near future, no one will buy printed books or newspapers. In my view, printed
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contents
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 will not exclusively disappear and in
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essay
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 I will give some
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 about my opinion. On the one hand, there is no dept that digital materials have increased rapidly,
due to
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 their comfortability and readability.
For example
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, many digital book apps offer
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readable
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contents
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 with adjustable fonts.
Moreover
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, they offer high-quality text for any
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digital
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,
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such
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 as smartphones, laptops, computers and etc. And
this
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give
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for
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consumers easy accessibility
any
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 time and anywhere.
On the other hand
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, digital media can decrease the production of
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, which I think will be beneficial for the environment. Nowadays, we can see that
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paper production has
the
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 major environmental impact
to
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 the environment. The rising of
logging
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 industry can influence the decrease of wild animal habitats and more
importantly
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 they have
impact
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 on
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global warming. As we all know
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the high gas substance of oxygen
are
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 produced by plants. As the
results
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result
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, the cutting of forest trees may
increased
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 the average global temperature.
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, not everyone has
an
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access to the internet.
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, people living in villages and
countrysides
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 will not
able
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 to get instantly access to online information. So there is why they
preffer
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prefer
 printed materials.
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, spending
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 huge amount of time on
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the screen
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 can lead to screen
vatigue
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fatigue
 and strain, which will be harmful
for
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eyes
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the eyes
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.
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, despite the fact that digital
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have
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spred
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spread
 widely,
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physical books and newspapers will
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 too. So we cannot say that printed
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wiil
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will
 not completely
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 in future.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This will help the reader understand your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Organize your points better. Use clear paragraphs to separate different ideas. This will help your essay flow better.
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Provide more examples to support your main points. This will make your arguments stronger and clearer.
coherence cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes. For example, 'noticable' should be 'noticeable', and 'preffer' should be 'prefer'.
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You have identified both sides of the argument, which is good for showing a balanced view.
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You have some relevant points about the environmental impact, which adds depth to your argument.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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