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"In the future, no one will buy printed newspapers or books, because everything they want can be read online without paying for it."

Nowadays, a noticeable number of people prefer digital media to printed
materials
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, as it is considered more convenient.
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, some believe that in the near future, no one will buy printed books or newspapers.
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, I believe that printed content will not completely disappear, and in
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 I will present some arguments to support my opinion. On the one hand, there is no doubt that the use of digital
materials
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 has increased rapidly
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 their convenience and readability.
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, many digital book apps offer readable content with adjustable fonts.
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, they provide high-quality text on various digital devices
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 as smartphones, laptops, and computers.
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 gives consumers easy access to information anytime and anywhere.
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, digital media can decrease the production of paper, which I think will be beneficial for the environment. Nowadays, we can see that paper production has a major environmental impact. The rise of the logging industry can lead to the loss of wild animal habitats and, more importantly, it has an impact on global warming. As we all know, oxygen is produced by plants.
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, the cutting of forest trees may increase the average global temperature.
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, not everyone has access to the internet.
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, people living in villages or the countryside may not be able to access online information instantly.
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 why they prefer printed
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.
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, spending a long time on screens can lead to eye strain and fatigue, which is harmful to the eyes.
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, despite the widespread use of digital content, physical books and newspapers will still be used.
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, we cannot say that printed
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 will completely disappear in the future.

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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement that outlines your main points in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates to the main idea of the paragraph.
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Add more specific examples to support your points in the body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
content
You have good ideas and arguments in your essay.
structure
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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