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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Many monuments, which are a part of our cultural diversity are protected and reconstructed by law. A few people think these structures should be destroyed and something new should be constructed. How important is it to put more effort into monument maintenance? Do you think that through their maintenance, history is coming in the way of progress?

All the sculptures are
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 part of
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history which helps
people
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 to connect with their roots .
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, some individuals think these monuments should be demolished and modern structures should be constructed in order to
enhances
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 the beauty of the city . In
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my opinion
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opinion
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opinion,
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 the monotonous get repaired for
the
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future generations and I am going to discuss
in
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this in
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the
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further
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 paragraphs. To commence with, in
this
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 contemporary era ,
people
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 would love to see
a
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new and innovative things around
themselves
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them
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 which
provides
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 pleasure to their eyes and make the environment look fresh and exquisite and
that is
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 viable with the advancement of
the
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technology
hence
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 it will
invites
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the a
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 lot of opportunities. Recently, in
Bombay
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Bombay,
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 a 500 old years historical building was dismantled and a
5 star
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 hotel
constructed
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was constructed
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 at the same place . On the other side , the
ancients
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 tombs , statues and
the
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buildings are the source of knowledge and information.
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, the subject of history in the schools has introduced to connect the younger ones with their
ancestors
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ancestor's
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 beliefs and customs and when they see the monuments they will get a sense of accomplishment and bravery. These places
also
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 become a source of income from
the
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tourism .
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, Hari Singh Naulwa was the greatest emperor
of
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the
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Sikh history and his statue is at India
gate
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 which exhibits he is sitting on
the
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a
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 horse with
sword
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a sword
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 in
his
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one hand . A Taj
mahal
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is
on
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one
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 of the famous
tourism
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 spots .
People
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 visit there
so
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to
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 see the beauty of the building.
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, the monotonous is not only the source of education
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, it
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 generates money which is used for the well-being of the public and with the joint efforts of local
people
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 and the government these places should be promoted.

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task achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. You should clearly state your main argument or position on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas better, which can help the reader follow your thought process.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your work for small errors, like typos or missing articles, which can distract from your message.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples of monuments and their cultural significance, which supports your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Preservation
  • Restoration
  • Architectural integrity
  • Tourism industry
  • Intangible cultural value
  • Adaptive reuse
  • Urban development
  • Heritage conservation
  • Archaeological significance
  • Sustainable development
  • Antiquity
  • Ephemeral
  • History enthusiasts
  • Contemporary relevance
  • Innovation
  • Obsolescence
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