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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

There is a type of
people
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 who likes to
work
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 in
a big companies
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a big company
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.
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,the other types of
people
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 prefer to
work
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 for a growing
company
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.in my
opinion
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opinion,
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i
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I
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 think that both views are equally important On the one
hand
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 a class of
people
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 prefer to
work
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 for
a large companies
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large companies
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 because they think it
had
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has
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many benefits. In fact, working in a large
company
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 will improve your skills in a very professional way.
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addition
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 the salary is going to be very high and it will cover all of
there
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their
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 needs.
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, if you were an employee in a big
company
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 you will
got
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 more attention in your social life and that’s a really important point.
As a
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result
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 it’s better to
work
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 in a large
company
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.
On the other hand
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, other
people
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 argue that working in
a
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an
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un popular
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unpopular
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company
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 is better.
In other
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words
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 they have a belief that it can help them build themselves and be
sharp minded
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sharp-minded
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 individuals. In fact , you can be able to get promoted as soon as you
made
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make
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 more money for the
company
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. A study was done in
qatar
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 that 90
percent
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per cent
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 of
people
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 who worked for small companies were more successful.
As a result
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, working for a small
company
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 can make you a different person and change your life. A class of
people
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 likes to
work
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far
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for
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 a big
company
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.
While
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, on the other side
people
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 prefer to
work
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 in a small
company
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. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 believe that working would make you a better employee no matter if
u
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you
were
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are
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 in a small or big
company
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 you just need to do the best you can.

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task achievement
Try to make your introduction clearer and state your preference more strongly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words between ideas. This will help your essay flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check spelling and grammar. Some phrases are hard to understand because of errors.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, which is good for showing understanding.
task achievement
You provided reasons for both choices, which adds depth to your writing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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