Some people think that being able to communicate online is breaking geographical barriers and enabling people, who would never have the chance to meet, communicate onlcine. What are the advantages of international communications? Are there any disadvantages too?

Few individuals opine that
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online is removing international
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pupils able to digital
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, who would never have the chance to meet . I believe that it has pons and cons
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evident that, it
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the
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. which makes people geographically independent.
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, proponents can improve their
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learn new languages by interacting with multicultural people.
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in
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tongue, just with the help of social
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sites
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talk about the drawbacks of visual
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criminal activities. It is
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for those people who are uneducated.
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digital
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for
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with their friends and relatives . He
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any new app . He
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it with his contract number and email.
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present time , individuals
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on online applications
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their bonds less
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strong
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. To
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would reckon that
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approach towards using
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electronic
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by taking its downsides into consideration to gain holistic growth in
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walk of life.

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task achievement
Make sure to use correct spelling and grammar to make your writing clearer. For example, use 'boundaries' instead of 'bonderies'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your essay with clear paragraphs and transitions. Each paragraph should have a main idea that connects to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple sentences to express your ideas more clearly. Avoid complex sentences that may confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have given personal examples, which make your points more relatable. It's good to show personal experience!

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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