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Many countries want to host international sports events, while other countries think that hosting sports events has more problems rather than benefits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some states prefer to
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events
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 in sports,
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 others suggest that holding
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events
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 has more drawbacks than merits.
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 both views hold valid points
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 as boosting the local economy and raising safety concerns, respectively, I believe that these kinds of
events
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 contribute positively to the
host
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 country, particularly in economic terms. Many
countries
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 like hosting international sports
events
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 the economic benefits they gain.
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events
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 attract large numbers of tourists from various
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, who spend lots of money when
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 to the
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 country.
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, during that time hospitality services earn significant revenue from an influx of tourists, which boosts local businesses and strengthens the economy.
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, Azerbaijan has been hosting Formula 1 for several years
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now, which brought millions of dollars to the domestic economy and made the country popular on the international stage. The example highlights how beneficial it is to
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 international
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.
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, the involvement of a large number of individuals in any kind of international event may pose potential risks regarding safety. Participation in those
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 can be dangerous both for guests and locals
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management.
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 to say, these security risks deter some
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 from hosting them.
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, in 2009, when hosting the Eurovision Song Contest, the Russian Federation detected a planned attack aimed at disrupting the event.
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, though opinions on whether it is beneficial to
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 international sports
events
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 or not vary, I believe that if managed effectively, it has more advantages which lead many
countries
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 to
host
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 them.

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task response
Consider providing a clearer outline of both views in the introduction, and ensure that your personal opinion is clearly stated.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion reiterates your opinion effectively. You could also include a final thought that summarizes why hosting events is beneficial.
task achievement
The examples provided effectively illustrate the points made and enhance the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay displays logical argumentation and structure throughout, making it easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • host nation
  • economic benefits
  • infrastructure development
  • global standing
  • international investments
  • cultural exchange
  • financial burden
  • debt
  • environmental impact
  • short-term economic boost
  • facilities underutilization
  • displacement of residents
  • tourism
  • job creation
  • visibility on the international stage
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