Many government spend a lot of money on art. Some people think this investment in art is necessary, but others say the money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are competing views on whether
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governments should spend
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on
art
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or on
education
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and
health
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.
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some argue in
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of
art
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, I disagree because
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doesn't contribute to countries' development like
education
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.
Governments
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investment in
art
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will not benefit the country's development. Many paintings are sold
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millions, but that
money
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goes to the artist. It will not contribute to new projects or plans to improve the city, but
education
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would.
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France
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government pay thousands of dollars per year to artists, the problems in Paris
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as pollution and overcrowded buildings remain unsolved. Even though
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is an important part of
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civilization, I do think that government should spend
money
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on more important aspects like
education
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and
health
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. Investments in
education
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and
health
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will improve
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life conditions. Take,
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, what Japan's government did after
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World War II. They invested in learning their young
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generation
, and that
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is what
build
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and solved the capital Tokyo we
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impressed by today.
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,
money
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also
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should be put
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health
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system to enhance citizens'
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. It will help their well-being, which will
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them perform great in their jobs. I agree with
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argument because of the reasons stated above. In conclusion,
although
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art
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is important, I don't believe that governments should invest in it because it will not build improvements in the country. I strongly agree that
money
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should go
instead
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to
education
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and
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health
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the health
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system.

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Check your grammar and sentence structure to avoid mistakes.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a good structure with an introduction and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural legacy
  • nation's history and identity
  • fosters creativity
  • economic benefits
  • tourism
  • art markets
  • quality of life
  • cultural understanding
  • productive population
  • personal and economic growth
  • fundamental for long-term development
  • well-being
  • immediate tangible benefits
  • abstract benefits
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