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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age.
The provided diagrams give information about the development of cutting
equipments
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 in 1.4
million
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years
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 and 0.8
million
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years
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 ago. A detailed analysis reveals that the
front
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view
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 of the
tool
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, 1.4
million
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years
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 ago, was more in
weidth
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width
weight
 from the
bottam
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bottom
 than the top.
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Side
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The side
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view
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 of the same
tool
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 was similar in height but was more thin than the
front
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 shape.
Back
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view
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 was almost
same
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the same
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 in
weidth
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width
weight
likewise
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 the
front
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 shape. In contradiction, 0.8
million
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years
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front
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side
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 of the cutting
tool
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 was bigger in size as compared to the the presented 1.4
million
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years
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tool
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.
Similarly
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,
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side
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the side
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view
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 was
also
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more thin
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thinner
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 in size than the 1.4
million
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years
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tool
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.
Furtermore
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Furthermore
,
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the back
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back
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backside
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side
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 was
also
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 similar in
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the weidth
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weidth
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width
weight
 of
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front
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the front
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side
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.
Overll
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Overall
,
ccutting
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cutting
 tools presented
in
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0.8
million
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years
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 ago looked more
shap
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shape
 and bigger in size as compared to the equipment indicated
in
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the
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apply
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1.4
million
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years
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 ago.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, years, front, view, tool, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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