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The pie charts give the data related to reach ratio in Yemen and Italy between 2000 and 2050.

The pie charts give the data related to reach ratio in Yemen and Italy between 2000 and 2050.
The pie charts depict the data related to is ratio in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and assumptions for 2050.
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, in 2020, you mean
have
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 the highest
population
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 of younger ones,
where as
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whereas
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same
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the same
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 category of
population
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 holders released
percentage
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a percentage
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 in Italy. After 5 decades, it is assumed
to
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that
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the middle
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middle
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 East inhabitant
bill
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will
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 contribute
to
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largely to
yemens
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Yemen's
Yemeni
population
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,
while
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largest
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the largest
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 proportion of
inhabitance
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inhabitants
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 in Italy will be elders. In 2000, both
the
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Nations had contemporary
population
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 ratio statistics in Yemen,
highlights
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 in the opposite trend of birth rate and death rates
their
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that
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 why the inhabitants
of
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0 -14 years old
one
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are one
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
population
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 and only 3.6% of the total people are
elder
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elderly
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moreover
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 in Italy working is
population
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 61.6% of the total residents. Younger
once
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ones
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 were not more than 15% and nearly 14th of the line inheritance
were
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was
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 above 60 years
age
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of age
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. Later, in 2015 it is
a
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projected that middle-aged people will show
incline
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an incline
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 in their fraction where
has
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only 37% of the entire public will be less than 14 years
.
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old.
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Elderl
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Elderly
 citizens are
a
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supposed to share 5.7% of
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the Yemini
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Yemini
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Yemeni
population
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.
furthermore
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,
mortality
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the mortality
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 rate will be highly affected
a
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resulting in a number of senior citizens. Less than 12% of the people will be underly 50% of the whole citizens categorised as reproductive is
group
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a group
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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