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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Countries should produce the food that their population eats and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to you answers

While
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 some people believe that the farming and manufacturing sectors demand high physical labour and time, they argue increasing the portion of food may
better
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be better
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. In my view when importing
meal
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meals
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not
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does not
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 depend on other
countries
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while
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this
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 field is
efect
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perfect
 to personal life. In
this
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essay
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 I will
eloborate
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elaborate
 my both view
openion
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opinion
 and give the
conclution
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conclusion
. First and
formost
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foremost
for most
, most of the time when importing meals is not good for
humans
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human
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 health.
Beacuse
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Because
, importing food may take
long
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a long
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 time to reach
due to
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 the other
countries
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 distance.
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, if taking
meal
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a meal
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 from New Zealand like meat and milk, it has to
be
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wait
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wait
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morethan
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more than
 8hours to reach and to frozen overcome spoil.
This
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 may impact
for
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apply
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the food quality.
Secondly
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, if
the
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all communities buy their snacks from the farmers of the country they might
motivate
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be motivated
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 to do their job. As
wel
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well
 as
,
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apply
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 the farmers compel to do their farming
according to
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 the requirement of the nation.
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, needed
vegitarian
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vegetarian
according to
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 the
countries
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 person's
requirement
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requirements
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 like they need more
vegitables
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vegetables
 than meat . In
conclution
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conclusion
, most of
the
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apply
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society can
gat
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get
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 their groceries from
same
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the same
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 country at a better price and better quality.
Also
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,
this
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 improves
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countries
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the country's
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 economy as
wel
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well
 as
improvement
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the improvement
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 of
farmers
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farmers'
farmer's
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life
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lives
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. Your main ideas should be easy to find.
task achievement
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and give more examples to support it. Make your arguments clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar. Words like 'effect,' 'vegetarian,' and 'because' need to be corrected for clarity.
task achievement
You provided some important reasons for your opinion, which is a good start for your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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