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Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.

Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.
The pie chart compares the amount of
money
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 from the police budget allotted to various departments , and the table shows how much
money
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 was distributed from different sources over a period of 2 years
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, a large amount of
money
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 was funded for the officers and staff working there, and it was largely contributed by the National government.
According to
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 the table, the National government contributed the highest at 175.5
million
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 in 2017 which grew to 177.7
million
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 in 2018.
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, the
revenure
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revenue
 collected through local taxes was 91.2
million
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 in 2017, and rose by 11.1
million
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 in 2018.
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, the budget from other sources,
such
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 as grants, remained relatively stable at 38
million
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 in 2017 and 38.5
million
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 in 2018. As shown in the pie chart, the majority of the budget was given as salaries for officers and staff members, to be precise, 75 % of it was provided in 2017 which later declined to 69 % in 2018. Meanwhile spending on transport
a
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apply
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and buildings remain unchanged for both years at exactly 17%. Despite the cyber department
recieved
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received
 the lowest share compared to other sectors, the portion of the
money
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 allotted rose from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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