In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting University studies. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this.

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an argument that
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. on
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hand, young people have
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role in society
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when they decide to travel and discover the world that
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them to decide many
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about
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, some
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families
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kids to take a year or two before start college to take a breake and knowing what aculty they want
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sing in many diffrent clases in many majors to decide what they want to study in collgee.
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kids and
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is bad for them and
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their life it is
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possible to say that some kids may not come back
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countries. in conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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tend to
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believe
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the end.

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language
Make sure you use correct spelling and grammar. For example, 'travelling' should have two 'l's and 'family' should not be spelled 'famlies.'
structure
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Start with a clear introduction, followed by paragraphs for each main point, and a conclusion.
content
Use more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention specific benefits or risks of traveling.
content
Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of traveling, showing a good understanding of the topic.
structure
You provide your opinion at the end of the essay, which is a good way to conclude your thoughts.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadened horizons
  • valuable life experiences
  • personal growth and development
  • engaging with different cultures
  • overcoming challenges
  • acquiring new skills
  • maturity
  • self-awareness
  • work experience
  • employment prospects
  • academic momentum
  • re-adjust
  • study habits
  • academic performance
  • financial aspect
  • pursuing certain activities
  • financial strain
  • university tuition
  • living expenses
  • perceived delay
  • inadequacy
  • anxiety
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