Some people believe that increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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congestion and
pollution
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due to
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have become
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debated topic. Many suggest that increasing
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prices
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would solve the ongoing issue.
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essay argues that increasing
petrol
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prices
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would not be the solution and authorities have a crucial role in solving
traffic
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and
pollution
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by encouraging
people
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to
use
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public transportation and build new
roads
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to ease the
traffic
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. In today’s modern world, where overpopulation and
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are one of the main problems in
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society, increasing
petrol
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prices
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would only hinder the situation.
People
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obliged
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to
use
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private vehicles
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lack
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of support
of
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public
transportations
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transportation
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and
roads
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. And increasing the price of
petrol
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would not be the ultimate solution since
people
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do not have any other alternatives. Public transportations work in limited schedules and routes,
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people
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who work at night or where they work
out
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outside
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of public services’ route cannot travel.
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, many public
transports
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transport
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such
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trains
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as trains
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or busses are expensive and uncomfortable to travel with
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overcrowding , leading
people
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to choose their own automobile. All these reasons may cause
traffic
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congestion and ultimately,
pollution
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. Governments have a vital role in solving
traffic
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and
pollution
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problems. To mitigate
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issue, public funds can be used to increase
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routes and longer shifts for public
transports
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transport
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such
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as
bus
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buses
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,
tram
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trams
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or trains in order to encourage
people
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to
use
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it
in
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any time and destination. These services could have eco-friendly fuels or electric power to reduce
pollution
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.
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, many public
transports
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are expensive,
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reducing the cost of the tickets could
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passengers to
use
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public transportation. Switching to public transport can significantly reduce
people
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’s carbon prints.Another solution could be to construct more
roads
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in order to have alternative routes for drivers,
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could significantly affect
traffic
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congestion. In conclusion, raising the
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prices
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are
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not effective enough to solve
traffic
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and
pollution
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.Authorities should provide citizens
for
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better public transport with reasonable
prices
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and alternative
roads
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and encourage them to
use
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more public transport in order to reduce
pollution
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.

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Provide a clearer opinion in the introduction to make it more obvious whether you agree or disagree with the main idea.
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Add more examples to support your points, especially about public transport improvements.
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