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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

nowdayes
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Nowadays
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year
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 rest before high school or university becoming popular for work purposes or to travel ,
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 think
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it's
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postive
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positive
 thing and
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 will
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discuss
 both
advantages
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 and disadvantages in
this
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 essay.
to begin
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 with , people
they
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apply
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need rest after
fnishing
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finishing
any thing
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anything
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 hard
to
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for
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 them in life and if they take
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a resst
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resst
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rest
resist
 and continue their education they
well
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will
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 be
more fresh
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 to observe
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the information
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 that they
reseve
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receive
reserve
,
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big
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the big
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 company giving their employees
a
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holyday
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holiday
 to come back and be more productive in their work which goes alos for the
student
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 and the other
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positive
 impact is teaching a lot of things when they travel
such
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 as being independent and taking
experince
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experience
 of life .
on the other hand
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 , there is
negative
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a negative
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empact
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effect
one
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on
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 them as if they will be
more late
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later
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 to their friends or
student
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 of their same age which
lead
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leads
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 to some
difficultes
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difficulties
 after
graduate
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graduating
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for example
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 , some
company
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companies
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the
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apply
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give
advantages
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 to the
student
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 who
graduate
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graduates
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 first and have the priority to get
hierd
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hired
,
secnondly
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secondly
, some
student
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 after they take
1
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1-year
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year
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 drop from
countinue
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continue
 the university they gave up and not complete their
educatian
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education
. in conclusion, regardless of being 1
year
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 late on their
paris
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Paris
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,I
held
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believe that the
advantages
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outwigh
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outweigh
 the disadvantages . in conclusion, regardless of being 1
year
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 late on their pairs ,I
held
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believe that the
advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages .

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grammar and vocabulary
Work on spelling and grammar. Check for errors in words like 'nowadays,' 'rest,' 'positive,' 'discuss,' 'impact,' 'hired,' 'secondly,' and 'education.'
coherence
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports your main point. You should connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your ideas. More facts can make your essay stronger.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, stating that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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