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As technology advances, travelling to space is likely to become an option for holiday makers in the future. What do you think are advantages and disavantages of space tourism?

In
the
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recent
year
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, The technological advancement in the
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space
 industry
is
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 unstoppable. The travel enthusiast thinks that flying to
thr
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the
space
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 will be an easier option in the near future. Because of the
resuseable
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reusable
reuseable
 rocket which has been invented recently.
This
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eassy
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essay
easy
 will talk
over
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 the
pro's
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 and
con's
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 of
the
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space
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tourism
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.
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space
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tourism
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 is not as easy
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 as the other
mode
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modes
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 of transportation used in
the
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tourism
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.
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throughtout
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throughout
 the course of human history
on
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 one ever thought about
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reusable
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 rockets
except
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 the man
name
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 "ELON MUSK". In
the
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 recent interview
to
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 the Time of India. He mentioned that
,
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 soon humans will be doing
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inter planetary
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interplanetary
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 travel with
help
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 of advanced rocket crafters.
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become
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 more viral among the travellers.
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, Despite
of
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being
about
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the
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happy after seeing the viral clips, Some vloggers conducted the
socail
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social
 event to
dicuss
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discuss
 the advantages and disadvantages of
space
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tourism
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. Some vloggers
says
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the
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 commerical
space
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tourism
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 can offer unique and unforgettable
experience
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experiences
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, to add to
this
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says
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 it will
opens
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 up new job opportunities in
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the spcae
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spcae tourisim
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space tourism
 sector and which
leads
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 to growth in
country's
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the country's
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 economy.
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, the other vloggers said it will be very expensive not everyone can afford it.
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,
to sum
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spce
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space
spice
?
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You have a relevant topic and your ideas about space tourism are interesting.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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