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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart shows the amount of money spent on distinct categories by the UAE government in 2000.
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, it is noticeable that the expenditure
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 providing social security
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in
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 the country accounted for the largest share.
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, debt interest and other
spendings
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 were the same ratio,
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 the figure for transportation was the lowest. It can be seen clearly from the graph that social security had the biggest spending, at AED 100
billion
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, followed by health and personal social services which comprised AED 53
billion
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.
Next,
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for education, the UAE government invested approximately AED 38
billion
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 in that time.
According to
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 the given data, other expenditures and debt interest made up the same proportion, at AED 23
billion
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. Meanwhile, the amount of money spent on housing heritage and environmental and employment, industrial, and agricultural purposes were around AED 15
billion
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 and AED 13
billion
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, respectively.
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, transportation costs consisted of the smallest portion, at AED 9
billion
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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