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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Your friend's dog has recently passed away. Write a letter to console your friend. In your letter: ·       Express your sympathy ·       Include memories you have about the dog ·       Invite your friend to do something with you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,

Dear James, I am deeply sorry for your loss my dear friend, and I hope you find strength to cope
up
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with the loss of your beloved dog, Harry. I can understand
you
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 situation and I
sympathaise
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sympathise
sympathize
 with your situation knowing well that Harry was your best friend. I grieve
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harry
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Harry
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 too but I worry about you more so I advise you to only remember
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 times you had with him and be grateful for the
time
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 spent
in
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making precious memories. Do you remember how we used to play fetch with him
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very
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 Sunday at Central Park
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 He used to make us smile inside and out he was
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 an adorable dog.
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 we used to visit our favorite
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 shop, where we used
o
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 buy him vanilla dog
ice-cream
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, which used to make him so happy that he used to jiggle
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this
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 tail for
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time
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. I can feel your pain, and I want to console you in your sadness, so I propose we spend
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 together at Central Park to pay homage to the beautiful memories that Harry left behind.
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, we can
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 eat his
favorite
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ice-cream
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 to
relive
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 those old times, which can ease
your
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our
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 pain. So
lets
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 meet on Sunday around 5:00 pm at Central Park. I hope you find strength and courage in
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. Best regards, John

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that sentences flow smoothly into one another to improve the overall clarity of the letter.
task response
Check for typos and grammatical errors to enhance the professionalism of your writing.
task achievement
You expressed sympathy beautifully, showing care and consideration for your friend's feelings.
coherence and cohesion
The use of personal memories added a nice touch to the letter, making it warm and relatable.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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