The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates.

The provided diagram outlines how high school graduates can get admission

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university

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. A detailed analysis reveals that

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students

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students'

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applications

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admin

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the admin

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office first. To be eligible for admission,

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need a high school degree

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they need to fill

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application form, which can be downloaded from

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university

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website, and

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submitted. Afterwards, if

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staff requires more

documents

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, they send provisional acceptance,

withih

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within

2 weeks, which indicates information about the other required

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students

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again

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compile their

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and send

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to the

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again.

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staff either accept or reject the applications. On one hand, if it does reject a form.

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have the opportunity to complete an alternative course form and submit it again.

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, accepted enrolments are done

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2 weeks, and later

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subjects are selected, registration with the Dean is completed and

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get

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entrance.

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university

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admin

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collects application forms from high school degree holders.

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this

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staff either ask for more

documents

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, cancel or accept the applications.

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